The Final Bite
It’s hard to impress me with chicken.
Each bite, sweet and crunchy,
Glistening crispness covering the outer layer,
Sweet honey mustard glazed across,
Breathtaking scents hovering around.
Steam rises up slowly.
Spices curl around my nostrils.
The first real bite crackles.
A soft and juicy center is revealed.
And yet… something feels different.
A small hint of cayenne rubs against my lips.
Pairing with the delicious sauces,
Tingling and teasing my tongue.
Beneath each bite, something lingers.
A new warmth of flavor.
The glistening golden skin disguises the truth.
Hidden within the seasoning.
My chewing slows. The room falls silent.
I rest my fork on my twitching fingers.
Could it just be the spices… or maybe something else?
My eyes begin to blur as the poison strikes.
Visions of the chicken fly through my mind.
The world drifts far away.
Each bite sends me further,
Beneath the glaze, beneath the honey,
With each glorious bite.
The heat claws at my throat.
My veins burst as my lungs collapse.
Everything becomes blurry.
My chair beneath seems to be drifting away.
My whole body goes numb.
My heart is pounding faster.
Everything fades.
I can’t talk.
I can’t scream.
I can’t move.
I produce tears that refuse to fall.
It wasn’t just spice.
It was my demise.
It was my final bite.
April 28, 2025 at 8:33 am
The poet really likes chicken. Obviously he enjoys eating chicken so much that he could depict a fine chicken meal very well. The end tone seems totally different from the beginning, leaving readers wondering what happened to the main character. The author set a very nice suspense in the end.
April 28, 2025 at 8:39 am
That took a really dark turn. I honestly wasn’t expecting that when I first started reading this piece. I like how you described the panic when presenting the unexpeced twist. The anaphora really set the sheer horror of the speaker as he meets his death.
April 28, 2025 at 11:50 am
The way that you highlight the appetizing nature of the chicken was quite impressive. The addition of the twist at the end is also quite pleasing to read, an unexpected twist from something so appealing is fantastic.
April 28, 2025 at 11:55 am
I really liked how it sounds like this man was almost having a body transformation at first, like he was turning into a chicken.
April 28, 2025 at 12:13 pm
I really like the format you used to write this piece! It invokes the feeling of watching the last moments of your life flash by from small moment to moment, starting with doing something mundane like eating chicken and ending with being poisoned. The descriptions made it feel both so real and so detached, like watching the events from outside your body. Super cool and unique!